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Family So Close by ~OceanFades:iconOceanFades:

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Headlights on
Headlights off
Headlights on
Headlights off
Headlights on
Headlights off

HEADLIGHTS GOIN ON AND ON AND

Headlights on
Headlights off
Headlights on
Headlights off
Headlights on
Headlights off

HEADLIGHTS GOIN OFF AND OFF AND

Frame
Crushed
Brain
Smushed
Blood
Flushed
Left untouched?

NOOOOOOOOO

NOOOOOOOOO

Their skin so
Soft
Their heads
Aloft
Headlights going on and
OFF

Headlights on
Headlights off
Headlights on
Headlights off
Headlights on
Headlights off

HEADLIGHTS GOIN ON AND ON AND


Headlights on
Headlights off
Headlights on
Headlights off
Headlights on
Headlights off

HEADLIGHTS GOIN OFF AND OFF AND

Going home
For a roast
Christmas eve
Now theyre toast
Speeding reckless
Down the roads
Never seen
This family close

Make a change
Cant see shit
No one talking
Snow wont quit
Looking out
Depression hit
No one even
Gives a shit
2 inches ice
Should make mental note of THIS

Headlights on
Headlights off
Headlights on
Headlights off
Headlights on
Headlights off

HEADLIGHTS GOIN ON AND ON AND

Headlights on
Headlights off
Headlights on
Headlights off
Headlights on
Headlights off


HEADLIGHTS GOIN OFF AND OFF AND

Frame
Crushed
Brain
Smushed
Blood
Flushed
Left untouched?

A speeding truck
Just one dose
Ive never seen
This family. SO. CLOSE.
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Christmas time. Gonna see grandma. Everyone is starin out the windows again, keeping to themselves. Blizzard hit hard. Roads are slick. Going about 90 cuz we're already late enough. Mom and dad still fight, I dont talk to anyone. My sister and her bf just broke up so she doesnt talk anymore. But its ok. We lost traction anyways. Slid right into the front of a semi which pinned us up against a tree. For a breif second before i died, i was happy. Our car crushed, I had never seen my family so close.....
©2005-2009 ~OceanFades
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~herblueness Jan 6, 2005, 9:30:12 AM
this comments form actually bothers me a little...o_O I don't know why. Maybe it's just too short and cut-off for me. It has a good point behind it, I just think that maybe something could be added...I don't know what, but it seems to me like something is missing...^^;

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~OceanFades Jan 6, 2005, 4:14:32 PM
*shrugs*

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Napoleon, like anyone could even know that...
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~IrisDemonsblood Jan 7, 2005, 12:52:55 AM
This is so freaking awsome. :D
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~ANIpunk Jan 7, 2005, 8:11:26 PM
The repetition is catchy, seems to have a SOAD touch to it. I can't really judge the thing as a whole, because in songs, music and lyrics work as one to emphasize one another, because with the accentuations of the "on and on and on and" part sounds akward with a silent background. I like the cut-off though of the part just mentioned, it emphasizes the abrupt end the family has in the story. That's a good quality, matching the tone of the lyrical voice to the story. Keep at it.
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~Freckledgrrrl Jan 7, 2005, 8:15:46 PM
Holy Zoloft, Batman...you are truly your mother's child...
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~OceanFades Jan 7, 2005, 8:21:29 PM
:d and truly glad for that i am :D

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Napoleon, like anyone could even know that...
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~OceanFades Jan 7, 2005, 8:37:32 PM
:D thank you very much, i made all of it up off the top of my head, flowed out of my stinkbutt it did :P

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Napoleon, like anyone could even know that...
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~OceanFades Jan 7, 2005, 9:11:41 PM
hehehe, thank you :D

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Napoleon, like anyone could even know that...
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